Allegory of the Cave Sonnet

Imprisoned for all time until the head
turneth; one was curious enough to see.
The fire, the shadows, the refraction lead
reality; the sun outside of the cave burns me.

Free of the shackles binding, walk forward.
Without the shadows the world is perfect,
Now turn back and share the knowledge coward.
Lessons here show the bravery of smurfette

Go back, share, remember, and recall the new world
But remember they also cannot see
As you once were, trapped in the swirled
views; turned away from the big blue sea

The empirical world, so relative.
The 'Forms' world, so expansive

Comments

  1. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 8:32 PM

    I think you did a great job! I feel that the different symbols you used made yours stand out to me. You did not stick to the simple allegory symbols but used things like "the big blue see" which really creates beautiful imagery! Awesome job.. and obviously you understand what a sonnet is. (:

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  2. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 8:53 PM

    Really good! I like how you used Smurfette in there, what a great way to rhyme with perfect. :) Haha.

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  3. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 9:43 PM

    This is the first sonnet I've seen that fits the definition of a sonnet in true Shakespearean style (most notably, "turneth"). I liked how you weren't afraid to carry on ideas between lines, instead of isolating each one. Great job!

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  4. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 9:50 PM

    Looks great, a well put together sonnet. I can find nothing wrong with it. Great rhyming, nice structure, and awesome imagery. The imagery goes along great with the Allegory. Good job!

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  5. UnknownNovember 24, 2012 at 11:08 PM

    Great sonnet but one problem. The rhyme scheme is ababcdcdefefgg and in two different stanzas you used see as the ending syllable. Can easily be fixed but just wanted to let you know. Other than that, flowed very well. Got to agree with Ng, No Fear Shakespeare.

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  6. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 12:10 AM

    I like that you focused on the idea of the freed prisoners being the ones to teach the still enslaved prisoners because I think that was a big point in Plato's eyes. You did everything needed for a sonnet (even the iambic pentameter which must have taken a good bit of extra time). Good job.
    This is comment towards your blog. It might be just me but the font your using for the text makes it harder to read and although stylish, can be distracting in my opinion. Just a thought because I'm big on blog design and first impressions.

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    1. Mackenzie GreeleyNovember 25, 2012 at 8:47 AM

      Sorry! I just got so used to the same font I didn't think about the viewers. Thank you, I got to change my theme just in time for the new season!

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  7. daniNovember 25, 2012 at 11:50 AM

    great job! it was creative and effective. although i am not sure its a "sonnet" it still illustrates that you are a creative thinker. please comment on mine:) http://danig14.blogspot.com/

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  8. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 12:54 PM

    Beautiful imagery. I love this sonnet! It is creative!!! I like the last two lines the most!! Good Job!!

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  9. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 1:30 PM

    I like how it was influenced by Shakespearean language ("turneth") and that it was very fun to read! Great job with the sonnet structure as well!

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  10. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 2:27 PM

    I agree with Ming. Great imagery! Good job!!

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  11. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 2:34 PM

    Great imagery! People should be referring to this sonnet if they feel stuck. You did a great job and I like how you got creative with your work. (:

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  12. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 2:40 PM

    Fantastic imagery and great metaphysical concepts (and you thought this wasn't very "deep"). This was VERY insightful and was a joy to read. I do have one slight critique though... There are a few lines that do not follow the structure of a sonnet written in iambic pentameter. Yet all in all this was great and I could tell you tried your best. Good Job Mac!

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  13. Bernardog236November 25, 2012 at 4:13 PM

    I agree with sam your imagery was awesome. Your sonnet is one of the best ones I have read.

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  14. RylandNovember 25, 2012 at 4:40 PM

    Also have to agree with the awesome imagery! I have no idea what the word "smurfette" means, if you could explain the definition that would be great! All around great job!

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  15. LizbethNovember 25, 2012 at 5:44 PM

    Nice job on the structure and rhyming. Summarizes the allegory maintaining the sonnet structure. Nice.

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  16. CWestNovember 25, 2012 at 5:51 PM

    I like how this sonnet shows your personality with your use of words like turners and smurfette. Very Mackenzie.

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  17. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 8:01 PM

    Great work, your entire sonnet was very well written! your use of imagery especially stood out to me.


    Comment on mine, please and thank you
    http://hjonesrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012_11_01_archive.html

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  18. LauraTrenevNovember 25, 2012 at 8:02 PM

    Your sonnet was one of the best I have read! Kudos on ACTUALLY using iambic pentameter. Thanks for commenting on mine!(:

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  19. UnknownNovember 25, 2012 at 8:08 PM

    Like the use of your own words. Like how it rhymed and summarized the theme.

    Please comment on mine
    http://pkimrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/allegory-of-caves-sonnet.html

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  20. E'AnaNovember 25, 2012 at 9:49 PM

    I really enjoyed it and the imagery was great. I like how you used different symbols to get ur point across. Good job :)

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  21. UnknownNovember 27, 2012 at 7:33 PM

    Dang...I think you did wonderful on this sonnet. Mackenzie you are so awesome!

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  22. Michelle CrosbyNovember 29, 2012 at 11:44 PM

    Dude this sonnet rocks! I'm so proud of you Mac-a-doodle. :D

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